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The maps describe the changes in Lakeside in the years 2000 and 2009.

The maps describe the changes in Lakeside in the years 2000 and 2009.
The two pictures describe the layout of Lakeside
town
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 as it was in the year 2000 as a changed design for the year 2009. The
overall
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 message from data seems to be that the main changes for 2009,
involves
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involve
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 the addition of the shopping
centre
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 and the removal of an
oldn
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old
town
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 and
derelic
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derelict
 warehouse. Of particular note, one of the residential areas and school remained unchanged. In 2000, Lakeside
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town
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 was mostly a residential area. There were three residential areas in different locations and the
river
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 with a lake
on
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at
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 its northern mouth.
In
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 the south-east side of the
river
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,
industrial
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an industrial
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 complex was located.
Furthermore
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, an old
town
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 and
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a derelic
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derelic
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derelict
derelicts
 warehouse were situated by the lake.
Also
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, to be west of the
river
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, there were
school
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schools
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 and art
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centre
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centres
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 as well. By 2009, the
river
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 running from south to north
run
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 to a pound.
Car
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A car
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 park was constructed on the original site of the
derelic
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derelict
 warehouse,
while
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 an
oldn
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old
town
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 was divided and knocked down to make
a
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apply
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way for offices and
library
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a library
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.
Moreover
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,
cinema
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the cinema
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 was built to replace
art
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the art
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centre
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.
Residential
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The residential
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 area which was located in the
south-west
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southwest
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 was demolished to construct the shopping
centre
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.
Additionally
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,
industrial
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the industrial
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 complex was enlarged and took place on the original site of one of the residential areas. Despite these changes,
school
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schools
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 and residential
area
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areas
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 which
was
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were
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 situated in front of an old
town
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 still exist.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, centre, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "describe" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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