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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The top diagram represents the way access to an area hospital in 2007 ,and directly below the subsequent growth and expansion in 2010 of the same diagram throughout 3 years.
Overall
, there
are
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 several changes
on
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in
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 the baths over 3 years and there are new structures
were
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 built . The
plan
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planned
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 development of the city hospital faced
a
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apply
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substintial
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substantial
 growth and modifications,
as well as
, the
The
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apply
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ring road
remained
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remaining
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 stable
a
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period of time.
Firstly
, the
puplic
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public
 car park
were
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 constructed with
entrance
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the entrance
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 in the west of it. From 2007 to 2010 Two roundabouts were built , one of them in the
center
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centre
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 of the map and it linked with
Bus
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 station.
Additionally
, the bus station
also
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 connected
with
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to
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 the
seconed
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second
roundabout in the city hospital.
Moreover
, there’s a gate in the southwest of
ring
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the ring
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 road for
Staff
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the Staff
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 car park.
Bus
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A bus
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 stop was added between the two roundabouts
throughout
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over
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 3 years.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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