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The following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubai in recent decades. Summarise the information by selec ating and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The following maps show some of the changes that have taken place in Dubai in recent decades. Summarise the information by selec ating and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The pictures present how
Dubai
 how much
Dubai
was
Verb problem
has
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 changed in the past and
at
Change preposition
in
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 the present
during
Change preposition
apply
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decades. As
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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observed, it is
clearly
Change the word
clear
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 showed the Clock Tower Roundabout in
Dubai
 in the
last
 decades has changed more and more modern,
that expanded
Wrong verb form
expanding
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 the civilization. The
just
Correct word choice
apply
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picture, which
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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in the past, Clock Tower Roundabout seemed to be like a rural area. The place
has
Verb problem
does
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 not
much
Correct word choice
have many
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 vehicles and just
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
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new buildings. Especially,
surrounded
Replace the word
surrounding
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 area
is not have
Change the verb form
does not have
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 residents with houses. The next picture shows the present day in
Dubai
. The city was covered by a lot of vehicles which is cars,
whereas
 it is more crowded with the
strongly
Change the adverb
strong
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 developments of the buildings. It seemed to be
a
Remove the article
apply
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progress
become
Fix the infinitive
to become
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 a downtown.
Thee
Correct your spelling
The
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 pictures illustrate that the Clock Tower Roundabout has
a huge differences
Correct the article-noun agreement
a huge difference
huge differences
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.
Comparing
Wrong verb form
Compared
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 to the past it is more crowded with the vehicles and
building
Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
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, but us less than the plants around.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dubai with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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