The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and chart below give information about migration to the UK. The graph below shows how long immigrants in the year 2000-2008 intended to stay in the UK. And the pie-chart shows reasons for migration in 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides data about how many
years
uk
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immigrants decided to stay over a period of 8
years
. The pie chart shows why they immigrated to the country in 2008.
It is clear that
people who wanted to live up to 2
years
saw a significant increase in 2004.
Also
, the main reason for migration was work, accounting for 38%. Focusing on the first picture,
non-british
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residents who
were
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intended to live more than 2
years
remained at the same level during the whole timeframe.
However
, only in the
last
year, the group of 2 to 4
years
rose by around 50
thousands
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in one year. Moving on to the second picture, it can be seen that there are several reasons why people desire to stay
such
as work, study, accompany/join family, and
other
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. Some of them didn't state their purpose
of
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immigration. More than half of the population came to the country for employment (38%) or education(32%), amounting to 70% in total. Followed by those, the proportion of people joining their families was 16%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • immigrate
  • emigrate
  • migration
  • immigrant
  • intended length of stay
  • short-term stay
  • long-term stay
  • trends
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • primary reasons
  • comparative analysis
  • contributing factors
  • data interpretation
  • work-related migration
  • study-related migration
  • family reunification
  • asylum seeking
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