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The maps illustrate an area of industrial area and the renovation

The maps illustrate an area of industrial area and the renovation
The given maps demonstrate data on how Industrial
Use synonyms
area
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areas
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 changed in the
future
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.
Overall
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,
entrance
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the entrance
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 and reception disappearanced, and new 3 bedroom and communal gardens formed
instead
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 of ones.
Moreover
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, in the
future
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,
factory
Correct article usage
the factory
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 altered
to
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into
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 apartments on the east
side
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 of the
area
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. When it comes to significant changes .
Firstly
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,
entrance
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the entrance
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 and reception
removed
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were removed
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, and 3 bedrooms houses
constructed
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were constructed
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side
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 by
side
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instead
Linking Words
 of
ones
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the ones
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 on the north
side
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 of the provided place.
In addition
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, communal gardens
built
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were built
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 in front of 3 bedrooms.
Besides
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,
factory
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the factory
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was ablationed
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ablationed
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ablation
ablations
 in the
future
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, but new
apartment
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apartments
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 and new parking
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area
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areas
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constructed
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were constructed
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instead
Linking Words
 of one.
Additionally
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, 6 offices and canteen which located to the south
side
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 of the
area
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 taken down in the
future
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.
Nevertheless
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,
big
Correct article usage
a big
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 parking garage
built
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was built
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instead
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 of one. Turning to the minorities changes
packing
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in packing
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 and strange, which
situated
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were situated
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to
Change preposition
on
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 the west
side
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 of the
area
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 removed, and
new
Correct word choice
apply
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two big
badrooms
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bedrooms
bathrooms
built
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were built
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instead
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 of
ones
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one
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.
Besides
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,
main
Correct article usage
the main
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 ways remained unchanged in the
future
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides, instead".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, future, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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