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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To that extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,living in a foreign
country
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 has become very common and popular but some
people
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 that it causes many serious problems ,
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 practical problems.certainly agree with
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 view and in
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 essay, I will support my idea with some examples. On the one hand,first and foremost,many
people
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 to have a comfortable life decide to immigrate
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abroad,
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,they don't use their mother tongue and they start to learn a foreign language,
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,speaking a new language , particularly for daily interactions,has never been challenging.it can create a miscommunication with native individuals and it would be hard to find a friend because they will avoid to a conversation if they don't understand it.
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:in daily activities
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 as purchasing food when you ask for some item to be bought,the seller will hardly grasp and understand their orders.
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:the sellers often become annoyed and enraged because they need to spend more time
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 services to customers.
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 ,in the contemporary, experiencing life in
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country
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 has more benefits than disadvantages because they not only try a new speech ,yo
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 as a chance to visit a new culture,history and tradition.
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:the researchers study about a group of
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 who learn more than two languge addict to visit many historical places and get familiar with tradions in proportain a group of person who don't like to learn a foreign languge.
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,the brains have understand faster than other peoples,
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:the students who go to another
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 to study at university or work at a company a higher intelligence rather than other
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 .
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, sometimes living in countries with different cultures and speech has more cons than pros. In conclusion :
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,living in a foreign
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 it has complication social and practical problems but you can mange these difficulties and enjoy our life with the best occupation and high education oppporunities .

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task achievement
Ensure your essay presents a balanced view with supporting points for both sides of the argument. This will strengthen your task response score.
task achievement
Use more specific examples that clearly illustrate your points. Personal anecdotes or statistics can make arguments more relatable and persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to paragraphing for clarity. Each paragraph should contain one main idea, making it easier to follow your argument.
coherence cohesion
Consider using linking devices and transition phrases to improve flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will help improve coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the main discussion points, providing closure to the essay.
task achievement
You've addressed both the social and practical problems as well as the benefits of living in a foreign country, indicating a balanced approach.
coherence cohesion
The introduction sets the context for the essay, noting an increasingly common reality of migration.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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