The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides data on the
number
of participants for different co-curricular activities at a single social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall
, film club was the most popular activity throughout the timeline while
the number
of amateur dramatics fell quite a bit at the end
of 2020. Also
, a good number
of participants showed their interest in the musical performances in the modern era while
attending martial arts and table tennis classes had their own popularity.
Firstly
, most of the participants showed their interest in the film club which was more than 60 in the beginning, a gradual decline then
happened and finally
the film club got almost 65 students in 2020 which was the highest among all activities during the timeline.
On the other hand
, the number
of table tennis aspirants was shy of 20 in 2000 which had a rapid surge in 2010 and by the end of 2020, it touched the mark of close to 60. However
, the number
of amateur dramatics was less than 30 in 2000 which had a slight growth until a dramatic fall made the number
5 in 2020. Also
, about 35 students started the martial art
activity in the beginning and the Fix the agreement mistake
arts
number
was the same after some ups and downs in the graph. Lastly
, after a gradual growth, around 20 students joined the musical performances department by 2020 though the number
was 0 till 2005.Submitted by jisan.path1506605 on
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