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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now,and how It will look after redevelopment

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The top diagram represents the plan of a
Univesity’s
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sports
 centre in
precent
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recent
 days. Directly below ,
the
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 expected growth and the modifications for the same
map
 in the future .
Overall
, there are several things
will
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 remain stable over a period of time which are Seating, Reception , the
pool
 in the middle of the
map
 , and
changing
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 room,
as well as
, there are many facilities
will
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 be built in the future . First of all , as we perspective in the
futrue
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future
 planned east the
map
 , the two dance
studio
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studios
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beside
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 each other with an
entrence
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entrance
 for each of them, In front of the Dance studio , there is the
Sports
 hall . Directly above the
sports
 hall
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there is the Gym which will be expanded
throughout
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over
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 a period of time. In the
southeast
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southeast,
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 a new changing room and Cafe will be constructed .
Moreover
, in
west
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the west
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the
map
 there are outdoor courts which will be replaced by a huge
pool
 called
Leisure
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the Leisure
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pool
. Below the Leisure
pool
, specifically in the
southwest
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 there will be the Changing room and
Sports
 shop.
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Make sure to provide a clear and comprehensive response to the task by adding more detail about how the new facilities will benefit the sports center.
coherence cohesion
Improve clarity by organizing your ideas logically and using clearer expressions to connect ideas, such as 'firstly,' 'secondly,' 'finally,' etc.
task achievement
The essay outlines both the current layout and the proposed changes clearly, helping the reader understand the key improvements within the sports center.
task achievement
The essay correctly maintains focus on the topic, comparing present and future states of the sports center.

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