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the table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and2009

the table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and2009
The provided table illustrates data on the figure of theatre in 4 different states in a European country from 2004 to 2009. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be clearly seen that the number of
cinemas
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 was dominant in
city
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center
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centre
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,
while
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 the count of
theatre
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theatres
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 in
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the suburb
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suburb
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suburbs
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 experienced a marginal decrease in the given period.
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, a moderate increase was considered
in
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near
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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,but the figure
of
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for
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cinemas
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 declined moderately in
countryside
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the countryside
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. Looking into the details, the number of movie
theatre
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theatres
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 increased moderately at 3.1% in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 and reached from 1512 to 1620 between 2004 and 2009.
In addition
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, the figure
of
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for
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cinemas
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 grew by an average of 1.6% and showed between 300 and 400. As for
suburb
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suburbs
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,
it
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they
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 experienced
moderate
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a moderate
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 change rate at -25%, dropping from 40 to 30 over the given period
years
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of years
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.When it comes to
countryside
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the countryside
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,there was
slight
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a slight
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 decrease
at6
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at 6
% in the count of
cinema
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cinemas
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 from 108 to 90.The total number of
cinemas
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 demonstrated a rise, increasing from 2100 to 2287, with a change rate of +2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinemas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 4 times.
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