The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying or drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying or drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar chart depicts the data of a survey about people's
coffee
and
tea
buying or drinking habits in five Australian
cities
.
Overall
, it is clear from the illustration that most people like to go to a cafe to drink
coffee
or
tea
in all
cities
. Apart from Adelaide, when they want
instead
instant
coffee
or
tea
, almost.  In the
last
month, the highest consumption of
coffee
or
tea
was in cafés in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart, with a
percentage
over 61%.
Furthermore
, the lowest
percentage
of consumed
coffee
or
tea
in cafés was in Adelaide at
aroughly
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roughly
a roughly
48%. 
According to
what is shown, the
percentage
of people who bought
an
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instant
coffee
was the second most
favorable
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habit in all five
cities
, with a
percentage
between 45% and 55%. Meanwhile, the lowest
hibit
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habit
percentage
of consumed
coffee
was to buy a fresh one in all
cities
.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, cities, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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