The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates the nutrition of two
category
of Change to a plural noun
categories
students
, and the table provides data on the
health condition Change the word
their
of
Change preposition
apply
them
.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Overall
, it is evident that both group
of Change to a plural noun
groups
students
consume
food with a Wrong verb form
consumed
high fat
Add a hyphen
high-fat
contenct
and cereals Correct your spelling
content
the
mostly, Correct article usage
apply
while
the less eaten nourishment was fish and fruit in two
groups. Correct article usage
the two
Furthermore
, the percentage of the overweight and illness
in the past year in Replace the word
ill
the
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apply
group
A was 2 times less as opposed to group
B
, although
the attendance rate
at classes was higher on
Change preposition
in
group
A.
Looking in more detail, the proportion of the
Correct article usage
apply
group
A students
who eat fatty food and cereals accounted for 30% and 35%, respectively. Likewise
, these types of the
nutrition Correct article usage
apply
preferred
by Add a missing verb
are preferred
group
B
, with 50% and 35%. Additionally
, the fruit intake rate
in group
A surpassed the other groups of students
, with
3%. Change preposition
by
However
, the
Correct article usage
an
equally
percentage of Change the adverb
equal
students
tend to consume a
fish, comprising Correct article usage
apply
of
5%. Change preposition
apply
Moroever
, the Correct your spelling
However
vegatables
Correct your spelling
vegetable
consuming
Replace the word
consumption
rate
was significant
higher in Change the adjective
significantly
group
A compared to group
Capitalize word
Group
B
.
Regarding the table, the ratio of overweight took up 10% of the total students
in group
A, though this
pattern for group
B
made up 20%. When it comes to the past year
Change noun form
year's
ilness
Correct your spelling
illness
rate
, the percentage of it in group
B
was 2 times higher rather than Change preposition
in group
group
A. Capitalize word
Group
In addition
, the participation rate
of the group
A students
constituted 90% of the total students
, while
this
figure for group
B
was almost 75%.Submitted by ilkin.abdullaev04 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, group, b, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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