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It is thought by some that life is better in a city. Others, however, prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#life #city #countryside
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There are different points of view about
to live
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 in a
city
 or in the
countryside
. It's not easy to say if one is better than the other because it depends on various things.  Talking about
the
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life
 in a
city
, there are some advantages and some disadvantages. An advantage is surely that you have the possibility to use many services,
for
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 it's very easy to order food using delivery apps or using those for
the
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food shopping. Transports could be
another fundamental services
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 for moving easily in the
centre
 of a
city
. Regarding the disadvantages
to live
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 in a
city
, there are a few points to consider. An important factor is the noise because if you go to live in the
centre
 of a
city
, you have to take the risk to listen to the noise generated by people or cars. Another disadvantage is probably the density of people
,
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 because if you live in a big
city
centre
, like New York
for example
, you are always between hundreds and hundreds of people. Talking about
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life
 in the
countryside
, the advantages and the disadvantages are probably the complementary ones of
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life
 in a
city
centre
. If you live in the
countryside
, you have to renounce
to
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delivery services or
transports
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transport
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 advantages and you have to use your car
for moving
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 from place to place.
However
, you live in a calm place and you don't have any type of problem regarding annoying noises, but there is the risk that you feel lonely though.
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, in my opinion, to live in a
city
 or in the
countryside
 is totally a personal choice. If you are a reserved person, you probably prefer
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life
 in the
countryside
, but if you are an extrovert person like me, you
could
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would
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 prefer to live in
a
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city
centre
.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines both viewpoints and your own opinion.
introduction conclusion present
Although the essay is well-structured, consider summarizing your main points effectively in the conclusion.
relevant specific examples
Use more specific examples to illustrate life in the city and countryside.
complete response
Essay effectively discusses both views of living in a city and the countryside.
logical structure
Logical structure is maintained with clear paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages.
supported main points
Main points about city life and countryside living are well-supported.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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