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The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.

The give graph shows the consumption of fast food in UK (per week) from 1970 to 1990. Write a report for a university lecturer making comparisons where relevant and reporting the main features.
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The line graph illustrates the data
of
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from
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 three decades from 1970 to 1990 about the use of fast food including
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, fish and chips, and
pizza
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, in the United Kingdom. The units are given in
grams
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.
Overall
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, the data shows an upward trend in the consumption of fish and chips, and
hamburger
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hamburgers
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, which started
from
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 the lowest and reached the highest from 1985 to 1990.
On the other hand
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, the utilization of
pizza
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 declined
throught out
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throughout
 the years, which started from the highest point. In the first year, starting from 1970, the consumption of
pizza
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 reached
at
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apply
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slightly above 300
grams
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,
however
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, it started to decline and lost 100
grams
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, which reached
at
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200
grams
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 in 1985.
Then
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, it saw a very minor change and
goes
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went
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minute
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a minute
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 above 200
grams
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 in 1990. Fish and Chips remained the most popular fast food and saw a dramatic rise
started
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starting
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 from below 100
grams
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 in 1970 and
reached
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reaching
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upto
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up to
 500
grams
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 in 1990.
Similarly
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, hamburger
also
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 caught
attention
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the attention
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 of consumers of fast food which resultantly indicates that during 1970 it started from less than 5
grams
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 and surpassed
pizza
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 in 1990 by almost 100
grams
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 and reached
at
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apply
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under 300
grams
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption trends
  • dietary preferences
  • steady increase
  • significant drop
  • peak points
  • economic conditions
  • marketing strategies
  • health awareness
  • public health impact
  • cultural shifts
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