You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: •explain which course you are interested in •say what you know about the university • explain why you should receive the scholarship
Dear Sir/ Ma'am,
I am writing in the context of
applying
a scholarship program in the university.
Add the preposition
applying for
Firstly
, I want to convey that I did Computer
System Technician course diploma at the Canadian college in Vancouver. And I am enthralled to continue my Correct article usage
a Computer
study
at your university with the undergraduate course name, " Computer Technician" that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
acutually
a scholarship program.
Correct your spelling
actually
Secondly
, I am thinking of doing this
study
at this
place because I have a lot of friends here and
are providing me with a large amount of information every time. Like, they already told me about Correct word choice
who
admission
process, exams, Add an article
the admission
study
, online assignments and what not
. Correct your spelling
whatnot
Moreover
, they also
told me how can I select my courses.
Having said that, I believe this
Add a missing verb
is a
a
best place for me to learn and grow myself. Change the article
the
Hence
, I want to request to get the
bursary so I can begin my Correct article usage
a
study
. Furthermore
, I think I have enough marks in past education that is
95% overall
with no less than 92% in any subject and other financial reasons to ask for the bursary.
I will look forward for
hearing from you.
Regards
SoojanaChange preposition
to
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complete response
Consider adding a concluding sentence to sum up your request for the scholarship, reinforcing the main points which justify your application.
greeting and closing
Be mindful of spelling and grammar checks, as small errors like 'acutually' can be avoided for clarity.
logical structure
Add transitional phrases like 'Furthermore' to present a stronger sequential structure in your arguments.
single idea per paragraph
Clear structure with identifiable paragraphs focusing on specific points (introduction, reasons for liking the university, and request for scholarship).
suitable writing tone
Polite and formal tone maintained throughout the letter, appropriate for an official letter of this nature.
greeting and closing
The letter has a well-written opening and closing, with a clear greeting and conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite