You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation

Dear Property Agent, I am writing in the context
for
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getting help to buy a house for me and my family since we are shifting to overseas for
employment related
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purpose
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. First of all, let me introduce myself, I am Simran, a Computer System Technician by profession. I have four more members in my family
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is father, mother , brother and husband. All of them are
also
moving
along with
me and they have their specific employers. Since I am moving with four other people, so I prefer a house with more space for each and everyone plus it would be great if the neighbourhood is
quite
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and clean.
Also
, having a garden is a preference but not a requirement. We are
hpoing
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hoping
going
to fly to another country in May 2025.
Lastly
, I would be delighted if it is in Vancouver, but New Westminister is fine too as these cities are close to my workplace.
That is
all.
However
, if have any
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, you can contact me
on
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given
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contact number. I will be waiting for your guidance and help. Regards Soojana
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task achievement
Pay attention to maintaining a consistent level of formality throughout the letter to ensure a suitable writing tone.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph conveys a single main idea to improve clarity and coherence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are polite and appropriately formal.
task achievement
The letter provides a clear introduction of yourself and your family, as well as a description of preferred accommodation and location, which is a strong fulfillment of the task.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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