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The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the diet and general health of two groups of students. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
diet
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 information of two
groups
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 of
students
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 which are
Group
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 A and
Group
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B
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 respectively
whereas
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 a table shows the health information of those
groups
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.
Overall
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,
B
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group
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students
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 have negative health issues
such
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 as being overweight, and ill in the past year, which are higher than A
group
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students
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. Again attendance at class is 15% higher for
group
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 A
students
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 than in
group
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B
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Firstly
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, both
groups
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 eat the same amount of fish and cereals and in the case of fruit
group
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 A consumes 8% which is only 3% higher than the other
group
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.
Moreover
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,the
group
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 A
students
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 consume more vegetables in their regular
diet
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 chart and differ by a noticeable amount which is 17%.
Furthermore
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, food with a high fat content is popular for both
groups
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 but it remains 20% lower in
Group
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 A regular
diet
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 chart.
However
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, the
diet
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 chart affects
students
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' obesity, illness and attendance rate in classes and has significant negative consequences on
group
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B
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students
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. Again,
Group
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B
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 suffers from obesity which is twice times high as
Group
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 A and 7% increasing illness than others.
Also
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, the attendance rate is 15 less for
Group
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B
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students
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 than for
Group
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 A.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diet, groups, students, group, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary patterns
  • nutritional intake
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fast food consumption
  • health indicators
  • diet quality
  • beverages
  • sugary drinks
  • health outcomes
  • obesity
  • physical activity
  • fatigue
  • health maintenance
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • balance
  • comparison
  • correlation
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