You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they like the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter • say what the participants liked about the hotel • explain why they were unhappy about the food • suggest what the managers should do to improve the food in the future
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter with regard to give you some feedback got from our guest, who are really not happy about the food
of lunch.
Although
,
our guests are really happy with your polite and active Remove the comma
apply
staffs
, they got every Fix the agreement mistake
staff
types
of help they wanted. Not only that but Change to a singular noun
type
also
your hotel evening activity was really enjoyable to
them. Mostly they like your clean and tidy hotel Change preposition
for
a
most.
Correct article usage
the
However
, most of them were come
from a long distance, so they were too Change to the active voice
came
have come
much
hungry but whatever Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
you served were
not heavy Change the verb form
was
food
like rice and meat. Our participants found that most of the food
was fast food
or juice. So, those foods were
not meet their expectations.
I would like to suggest Verb problem
did
you
that when it Correct pronoun usage
apply
is come
to Change to the active voice
comes
has come
serve
Wrong verb form
serving
food
you should consider the guests
origin and timing. Change to a genitive case
guest's
guests'
For example
, if you have most of
Change preposition
apply
the
Asian Correct article usage
apply
guest
Fix the agreement mistake
guests
then
you should serve Asian food
, like fish or meat etc. Also
, if you can add variety in
your buffet Change preposition
to
then
it will fulfill the guests
expectations.
Kind regards,
Md Monirul Khan HaidherChange to a genitive case
guest's
guests'
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples or suggestions to enhance the detail of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly conveys a single main idea to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
The letter's greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, maintaining a formal tone.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the task, covering what participants liked, their issues with the food, and suggestions for improvement.
task achievement
The writing tone is suitable for a formal letter to a manager.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite