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The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Rye mouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #rye #mouth
The provided map compares the
village
 of Rye
mouth
Capitalize word
Mouth
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 from 1995 to
present
Correct article usage
the present
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 From an
overall
 perspective, it can be clearly seen that there have been several changes in the map, but the most considerable alterations are the introduction of golf and tennis,
as well as
elimination
Add an article
the elimination
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 of
fishing
Correct article usage
the fishing
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 port.
Additionally
, minor changes along the roads As regards
to in
Change preposition
apply
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1995, the farmland was situated in the northeast of the
village
, and the forest park was located in the eastern of the
village
.
However
, the farmland and forest park are altered into golf and tennis at present.
Moreover
,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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eight houses were located in the northwest of the
village
 in 1995,
whereas
, there are a total of ten houses in the northwest of the
village
.
Furthermore
, the fishing port which
situated
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was situated
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 from the south of the
village
 in 1995,
it
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apply
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has been demolished
as well
as
Correct word choice
and
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 the fish markets
are
Wrong verb form
have been
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 shifted into apartments at present.
Also
, the five shops from the roadside are replaced with
a
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apply
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restaurants
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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