You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph compares the average monthly temperature in three distinct cities—Paris, Dubai, and
Sydney
.
It is clear that
Sydney
's line has a different shape to the others, which is warmer during the
winer
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winter
and cooler during the summer.  The temperature in Dubai goes up to more than 35 Celcius in August,
whereas
the other two places don't show that kind of dramatic number. The hottest weather in
Sydney
only reached slightly less than 25. Even that of the
european
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European
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city accounted for 20.
Also
, from September to March, it can be seen that Paris is the coldest place, amounting to 5 for two months.
Sydney
showed
a
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apply
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relatively stable weather among
three
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the three
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. The gap between the highest and the lowest
temeprature
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temperature
was only 10.
However
, Dubai and Paris, both experienced significant differences of more than 15 Celcius.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sydney with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • major cities
  • trends
  • temperature changes
  • comparisons
  • yearly pattern
  • geographical location
  • climate zones
  • significant variations
  • notable differences
  • peak temperatures
  • lowest temperatures
  • fluctuations
  • seasonal changes
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