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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtade- labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summsrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The provided tables depict data on how much
price
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the price
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 of coffee and bananas increased or decreased in 5 different countries between 1999 and 2004
years
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
value
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the value
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 of coffee in the UK significantly increased from 1999 to 2004 and became dominant
the
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over the
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 given time span.
Conversely
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this
 figure in
the
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apply
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Sweden
 remained almost unchanged during
this
 period,
while
cost
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the cost
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 of
banana
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bananas
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 in
Sweden
, nearly triple increased in the time span, and
this
 trend was dominant during
this
 period;
however
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however,
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this
 figure in Denmark almost
double
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doubled
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 declined in 1999 and 2004
years
. As regards to rate of coffee in the UK rapidly rose from 1.5
million
 to 20
million
 in
the
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apply
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half of
decades
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decade
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.
Besides
,
statistics
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the statistics
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 of Denmark and
Sweden
 slightly increased by 0.2
million
.
Moreover
, statistics of Switzerland experienced
double
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a double
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increased
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increase
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 in the 5
years
.
Whereas
,
this
 trend in Belgium
,
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 rose slightly by 0.7
million
 by 2004. Turning to the price of
banana
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bananas
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 in
Sweden
, experienced
considerable
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a considerable
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increased
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increase
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 between 1999 and 2004 and became dominant in
this
 period.
However
, statistics
of
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for
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 the UK and Belgium sharply increased almost by 5000000 during the 5
years
.
Additionally
,
cost
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the cost
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 of
banana
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bananas
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 in
Sweden
 and Denmark experienced fractionaly
fallen
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falling
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 from 1.8-1 to 2-0.9
million
 between 1999 and 2004.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, sweden, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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