Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that,in today's world,subjects like science and technology are more important than history.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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task achievement
Introduce more specific examples to support your arguments and make them more convincing. This will help in demonstrating your ability to relate abstract ideas to real-world scenarios.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical structure of your essay by organizing your points clearly within paragraphs so that each paragraph reflects a single main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Improve paragraph transitions to ensure a smooth flow from one idea to the next, which will help guide the reader through your argument more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has both an introduction and a conclusion, helping to frame the discussion.
task achievement
Acknowledges both perspectives on the topic, showing an understanding of different viewpoints.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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