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One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory houses for their increasing population, whilst still trying to perfect environment.

#today’s #governments #houses #population #whilst #environment
There
is
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are
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 a lot of
transports
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transport
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 a person can
use
 , the pie chart shows information on four
transport
 and how many people
use
 them, a
car
, light rail transit, bus and a taxi, with
table
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a table
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 providing reasons for
car
use
. The most usable
transport
 is undoubtedly a
car
,
overwhelming
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the overwhelming
an overwhelming
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 majority of people
use
this
 kind of
transport
.
Car
Correct article usage
A car
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 is the most functioning
transport
 since you own it and can
use
 it for your own reasons and wishes.
For
example
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example,
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 as the table shows
that
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the
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 vast majority of people
use
 cars to commute to work, for business stuff, for shopping, for leisure activities and for taking children to school. Light rail transit is used for commuting over long
as well as
 short distances . LRT
also
 commutes heavy carriage with great efficiency and safety. Taxi can be really practical if you
dont
Correct your spelling
don't
 have a
car
 and need to be somewhere very fast,
although
 it can be expensive. The bus
by contrast
 is cheap since
its
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 a public
transport
 and can be used by anyone, it rides around the town
in
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on
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 its own route and stops at bus stops, because it stops every 5 minutes it can slow you down and you
cant
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can't
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 be in time like on taxi.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear and organized structure. An introduction and conclusion are necessary to frame your discussion and summarize key points.
task achievement
Expand on your points more comprehensively, explaining the significance of each mode of transport and its impact on the overall theme of housing and environmental concerns.
task achievement
The essay highlights the practical uses of different forms of transport with examples.
coherence cohesion
The language used is clear and easily understandable.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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