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Social media has harmed people’s social life. Do you agree or disagree? Write a one- sided opinion essay giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#media #people’s #life #one- #support
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Social
media
 has transformed how
people
 communicate together;
however
,
people
 in the past used to meet
eachothers
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each other
 to be connected. In my opinion, social
media
 badly
affect
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affects
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 social
life
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lives
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 because it
decreased
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decreases
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 attaching and
people
became
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become
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 more
lonnless
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lonely
. To
bigan
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begin
 with, social
media
 reduced
the
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communication between
people
 by increase using devices.
For example
, in the past
people
 must walk or travel to visit family or
friend
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friends
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, nowadays
every body
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everybody
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use
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uses
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the
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apply
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digital
tools
instead
 of
traviling
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travelling
.
In addition
, Recent Research from (PSU) has shown that after using modern innovations walls
has
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have
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became
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become
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 between individuals. As a
resulte
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result
 of the
disconection
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disconnection
 in
the
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apply
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real life. In brief, digital
tools
affected
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affect
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 the relationship between
people
 and but
a walls
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a wall
walls
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.
Moreover
, after social
media
people
likes
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like
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 to stay alone
that
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which
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 leads to problems in
commuication
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communication
 skills.
For instance
,
Last
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the Last
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 study from (PSU) said the
avarge
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average
 of relations for each person has decreased
for
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by
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 70% in
last
 the 15 years,
this
 caused a
lonnless
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loneliness
.
As a result
 of using the new digital
tools
. Another example, the new generation
are
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is
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 facing a
damiging
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damaging
 in
commuincation
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communication
 to
frighen
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frighten
people
 because
off
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of
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 the small
amount
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number
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 of
humans
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humans,
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 they met. In short, the
decreasing
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decrease
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 in
releations
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relations
relation
 is leading to communications issues. In conclusion,
tecnology
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technology
 harmed
people
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people's
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 social lifestyles by reducing the real attaching between others.
lonless
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unless
,
anxeity
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anxiety
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anxeity
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anxiety
 to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary. , walls between
people
 and
less
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fewer
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 relations are the main problems
from
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of
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 social
media
. The
dogital
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digital
tools
 are for increasing
the
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apply
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communication, so I hope
people
 use them in the right way.
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coherence cohesion
Improve the clarity and organization of your ideas. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
task achievement
Introduce more specific examples and evidence to support your points.
cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy and word choice to make your essay clearer.
task achievement
You've clearly presented an opinion that social media harms social life.
coherence cohesion
The essay is structured with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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