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Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter • explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum • describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful • give details of when you would be available for work

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In recent years, there has been a significant debate over difficulties in getting enough sleep.
However
,
this
 phenomenon stems from
variety
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 of underlying factors, ranging from lifestyle to situation and well-being but there are feasible solutions that can be implemented for adverse effects of difficulties of sleeping and there are solutions for improving the
duration
 of sleeping. To commence with, one of the problems of lack of sleep hinges on the perception that there is enormous stress. stress can have an adverse effect on mental health and well-being.
Also
, well-being plays a vital role in business
life
 and personal
life
.
For example
, research in Denmark shows us that stress is an effective factor in heart attacks. Another enormous effect of bad sleep is the people who have
this
 problem living a dissatisfied
life
. Dissatisfaction
life
 lays the groundwork for depression
and
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acts as a catalyst for a weak personality and creates obstacles in motivation.
This
 is very negative
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particularly for young people. Addressing these issues requires a multifaceted approach.
Firstly
 people
that
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 have problems with sleeping should avoid social media and bad news. Meditation contributes significantly to having a good
duration
 and quality of sleep.
In addition
, giving advice from an expert consultant is very important and effective.
For instance
, there are medical doctors
that
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they
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 are specialists in pain and sleep. In conclusion,
while
 lifestyle and situation have sparked considerable concern about sleeping, we can implement a wider range of effective solutions to mitigate the adverse effect of the short
duration
 of sleeping and give rise to
improve
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 the
duration
 of sleeping.
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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Avoid overloading paragraphs with multiple ideas to maintain clarity and focus.
task achievement
Ensure your response directly addresses all aspects of the prompt for completeness.
task achievement
The essay provides a good introduction to the topic, indicating an understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear effort to connect ideas, demonstrating awareness of coherence and cohesion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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