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in many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and by food produced all over the world. Do ypu think this is positive or negative dvelopment? give reasons for yur answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowlage or experience.

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If you want to make Chinese noodles at home in London, you can easily buy Chinese products in your local market, which is the result of Globalization and Global trading. So what do you think, is it a negative or positive
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? In my opinion, it has mostly a positive impact on our lives, but of course, we can't ignore the negative sides as well. There is no dought, that in the 21st
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 we live in
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world
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, where Global
Traiding
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Trading
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 plays a crucial role in the economy.
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, consumers have
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easy access to food, which has been produced all over the
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. It has several positive
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 sides,
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, one of them is that customers get a range of different products around the
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 and
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it
people
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 are meeting and exploring new cultures and cuisines.
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, free trading helps local food producers to realise their production around the globe, which has a positive impact on their financial
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 and stability.
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, the Kaxeti region in Georgia, in the Caucasus is known for its wine-making for centuries. Before the free trading agreement with the EU,
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 in Kaxeti had difficulties in realising their local wine products.
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 after the free trading agreement, Georgian
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 started to sell local wine in European supermarkets, which helped local villages to build stable
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. Correspondingly
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this
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, Georgian wine became popular around the
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 and it has
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a positive
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 effect on the tourism sector as well. Taking everything into consideration, I am certain that it is
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 indicator that consumers can go to supermarkets and buy food produced all over the
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 because it raises cultural understanding and it helps financial stability to
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.
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, it has negative
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 aspects as well,
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 as monopolisation and health problems. I believe that
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 governments and societies can easily overcome
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the negative effects, by making strong and strict trading laws and standards.

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clarity
To enhance clarity, ensure that sentences are structured correctly and are free from spelling and grammatical errors. This will help convey your ideas more effectively.
examples
Include more examples from different countries, if possible, to demonstrate a broader understanding of the topic.
structure
Consider organizing your paragraphs with clear topic sentences and ensure each one focuses on a specific point. This will improve the logical structure of your argument.
structure
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.
examples
The examples provided, particularly the Georgian wine scenario, effectively illustrate your points about global trade and its positive impacts.
balance
You demonstrate good reasoning by considering both positive and negative aspects of the topic, which gives your argument depth and balance.
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