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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Fewer and fewer people today write by hand using a pen, pencil, or brush. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#minutes #topic #people #hand #pen #pencil #brush #development
More and more people now use their
hand
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hands
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,
brush
,or
pencil
 to write .
This
 development could be negative or positive in my opinion
this
 topic
have
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 a
tow
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 said . On the one
hand
 , writing by using your
hand
 ,
pencil
, or
brush
 has a lot of positives.In fact, using your
hand
 to write helps to move your muscles and blood around the
hand
 tissue.
In addition
, you can think of that as a simple exercise
to
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 your
hand
 . A study published at New York University found that 80% of people who use a
pencil
, pen,or
brush
 to write have a strong
hand
 and muscles.
On the other
hand
 . the topic has a lot of negative things, it is not fast to write.
for example
, people that work in an office need to be fast to write the most words
the
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they
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 can in a short time and using a pen or
pencil
not
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 the best idea
in
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the
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so using a kay bord
more
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easier
this
as
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is
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 one of the negative to using
hand
 ,
pencil
, or
brush
 . So we have two views that we talk about
it
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of using a pen,
pencil
,
brush
, or
hand
 , the negative one ,and the positive, in my opinion, the
the
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negative is more than the positive , in my school
i
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 need to do a lot of homework in a few days and if written by my
hand
 that will take more time so using a kay bord to write is better from my experience,
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introduction conclusion present
Focus on introducing the topic more clearly at the beginning, setting the stage for your argument. Ensure your introduction captures the essence of the question.
logical structure
Structure your essay clearly with distinct paragraphs for introduction, reasoned arguments, examples, and conclusion. This will make your essay more logical and cohesive.
supported main points
Expand upon your ideas with more detailed explanations and more specific examples. This will make your arguments more convincing and thoroughly developed.
complete response
Address potential counterarguments to strengthen your position. This approach will demonstrate critical thinking and a comprehensive understanding of the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
You've attempted to provide both sides of the argument, which is important when discussing whether something is positive or negative.
relevant specific examples
You included a reference to a study, which strengthens your point about the benefits of writing by hand.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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