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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the
last
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 year. As the graph shows 6 categories which are, Developed
countries
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, Latin American, East
Asia
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, Africa, Arab states and South
Asiaexperienced
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Asia experienced
 different types in same periods, Despite that, these shows as crystals, all regions females are the highest, on opposite way males are the lowest in the graph
also
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 South
Asia
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 is taller than developed
countries
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.
By contrast
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,
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in Devloped
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Devloped
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Developed
countries
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 in
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 almost 1
then
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, gradually increased in Latin
American
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America
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,
males
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with males
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 10 and females about 12 through East
Asia
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man
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men
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 decreased
until
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to
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 8 but Females
increase
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increased
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 double. On
other
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the other
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 hand the
last
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 three
countries
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 sharply increased for both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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, in Africa Femael being 56 and
male
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males
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 just 30,
Arab
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the Arab
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 States slightly increased upward
about
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to about
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 52 but in
male
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males
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 slightly decreased
until
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to
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 29, Fainally
about
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in
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 South
Asia
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female
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females
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 started at 58, male the half
a bout
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about
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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