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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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 estimated world
illieterracy
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illiteracy
 rates, by region and gender,
last
 year.
Overall
 the five major excepted different trends in the time period, Despite
this
, it is
a
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crystal clear that the developed countries, Lattin
Amrican
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America
,
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 and East
Asia
,
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and Oceannia
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Oceannia
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Oceania
 showed a decrease in males and had a
raise
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rise
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 in the opposite way the
last
 three areas which are Sub Saharan Africa, Arab States and South
Asia
 are in the peak of females. As the graph shows
espesially
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especially
 in males the first
rigon
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region
 is almost 1%,
on the other
hand
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 the females
also
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were also
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 at 1%,
further more
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furthermore
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 the
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number of womens
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womens
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women
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 in each
countries
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country
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 had gradually increased,
in addition
 in South
Asia
 was 55%, but in
the
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man was decline about half on the female. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the highest region in
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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 was the sixth region, all the countries
arisen
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arose
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 gradually in
female
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females
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 except
mals
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males
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 in
theEasr
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their
Asia
 and Arab States
has
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have
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un stable
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unstable
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