New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages of thus trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years modern technologies have

been

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affected to

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of chilfren's

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chilfren's

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children's

leisure

time

.

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both benefits and drawbacks, I share the view that it could be

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impact of today's advancements to spend

child's

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a child's

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memorable days. From the first perspective, there are more

advantageous

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advantages

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of using modern devices to spend days off at home

both

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children

and parents. The primary reason for

this

could be that gadgets

allows

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for

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students to surf any websites or social networking apps which

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knowlegde

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knowledge

about life aspect.

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, many parents

also

be

good

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way to fulfil their own tasks .

In addition

, by surfing devices,

children

can enhance not only

future

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life but

also

social

communications

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communication

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with

person

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who lives

in

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overseas, obviously

children

learn how to socialize

from

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others , especially

for

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children

who might

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shy or introverted in person.

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,

young

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generation would become creative by

entring

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entering

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platforms like

You tube

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Youtube

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or coding apps

allow

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children

to express their creative

explore

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interests in different fields.

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, using

technologies

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in free

time

have

also

negative aspects which could

consider

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in

this

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following paragraph.

Firstly

,

for

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amny

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many

any

children

allows

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to utilize mobile phones or gadgets which influence badly

for

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human

beings

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lifestyle and behaviours mainly

young

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generation, because many

kind

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of

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parents

do not restrict and have no

time

management to operate gadgets which concern

children

's wel,-being. They

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can

lose

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their

eyesight and

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mental

subject.

As a result

,

chikdren

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children

would become

unintileggent

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unintelligent

among peers.

Additionally

, they misplay

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social development with humans since spending too much

time

on

with

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screens may reduce opportunities for face-to-face interaction which leads to difficulties in

enhansing

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enhancing

social skills. Over and above , by digital entertainment

children

might prefer staying indoors rather than outside. So they adduct to

sedentary

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lifestyle which could contribute to obesity and other health issues. In conclusion, the

utilize

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of modern technologies could be

benefit

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for

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young people in

a

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various aspects .

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,

i

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might there are

high

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number of negative sides like health issues

as well

as

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lack of social

face -to-face

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face-to-face

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interaction ,

also

decrease

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outdoor

entertaings

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entertainment

amon

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among

*

children

should not be overlooked.