The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph compares annual ownership and the consumption of one of the volatile
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resources
in nine different
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territories
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that
although
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countries
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produced more than half of the oil that of
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consumption
is at a lower point.
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East countries,
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Canada possed that of 14.84%
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utilization
of Aradion areas three-fold higher than Canada, and Served 6.15%.
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respectively
presented as the outcome for Central and South America, Eastern Europe and Africa,
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nearly 7% usage.
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similar figure was reported by
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Eastern Europe for
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both considered components. with 6.58%
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is true for Asia,
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, and Western Europe , because their
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ownership. In comparison, only with below 3% of oil
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these three countries had consumed that of at least
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. The minority of the
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is in the Australian continent . with 0.30%,
while
other countries
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consumed higher than ownership by as much as
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twice
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