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The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportions of the world's oil resource held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares annual ownership and the consumption of one of the volatile
resoueces
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resources
 in nine different
teritorries
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territories
.
Overall
, it can be seen
thet
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that
although
 Gulf
counrties
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countries
counties
 produced more than half of the oil that of
consum
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consumption
 is at a lower point.
To begin
 with, just above half of
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 is belonged
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middle
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 East countries,
while
 Canada possed that of 14.84%
However
,
utilzation
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utilization
 of Aradion areas three-fold higher than Canada, and Served 6.15%.
Moreover
, 8.12% , 6.58% and 6.38%
respectivly
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respectively
 presented as the outcome for Central and South America, Eastern Europe and Africa,
whereas
 only the former and the second areas accessed
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 nearly 7% usage.
On the other hand
,
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 similar figure was reported by
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Eastern Europe for
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both considered components. with 6.58%
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,
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the reverse
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 is true for Asia,
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the United
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states
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, and Western Europe , because their
consuming
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 is higher than
the
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 ownership. In comparison, only with below 3% of oil
property
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property,
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 these three countries had consumed that of at least
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one-fifth
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. The minority of the
possion
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position
passion
 is in the Australian continent . with 0.30%,
while
 other countries
also
 consumed higher than ownership by as much as
twiced
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twice
.
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