Some people believe that it is parents who teach children to recycle waste. While others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Some people believe that
children
should learn about recycling of the waste materials from home. While
others believe that educational institutes should teach them about this
. Children
spend most of the
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their
time
at home with their parents
, so they are mainly responsible for teaching their kids about recycling. However
, schools
these days charge so much frok
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for
parents
in terms of certain activities
and children
these days spend more time
in the schools
, because of their timings so they should take this
responsibility. I will explain further
with examples.
The former statement, states that fathers and mothers should be responsible for making their child
learn about the stuff that can be recycledFix the agreement mistake
children
,
because kids spend Remove the comma
apply
nore
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more
time
with their families as compare
to their Wrong verb form
compared
schools
.furthermore
, babies starts
learning by watching their Change the verb form
start
parents
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parent's
parents'
activities
and start following whatever they do because if we stay longer with someone, we will adopt their traits as well. For instance
, when i
was seven years old, I used to observe my mother and she taught me how to make a bus, using cartons rather than throwing them, so Change the capitalization
I
i
learned Change the capitalization
I
this
and started making lots of toys from these carton
rather than discarding them.
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this carton
these cartons
On the contrary
, some people claim that,
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schools
should make students learn about reusing of
useless materials, Change preposition
apply
this
is because, they think that nowadays, school fees are ten times more as
they used to be in the past, so Correct word choice
than
this
becomes the responsibility of the institutes ti
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to
children
in learning about recycling. To illustrate, my younger sister's school fee is now almost the same as my university fee and she spend
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spends
her
most of Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
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her
time
in the
school and Correct article usage
apply
there
she learns new Correct your spelling
where
activities
.
To conclude
, it is the responsibility of parents
and schools
that they should teach children
about recycling,
because the more exposure they have to Remove the comma
apply
such
activities
the more they learn and follow.Submitted by dr.tehreemk on
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Expand on the argument regarding the schools' responsibility with more detailed examples or analysis.
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The essay effectively uses personal anecdotes to illustrate points, adding depth to the argument.
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