Writing task 1 The graph below shows the percentage of river water in the UK that is of good chemical quality, in the period between 1990 and 2002.

The line graph demonstrates data on

value

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the value

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of good chemicals in the UK rivers,

while

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this

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line illustrates

ratio

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the ratio

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of the UK

rivers

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river

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water between 1990 and 2002

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Overall

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, it can be clearly seen that

value

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the value

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of good

chemical

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chemicals

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in Wales and North Island river water started almost the same from 1990 to 1998, but in the next 4

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, these figures experienced

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a slightly

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slightly increased

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or

decreased

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.

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,

this

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trend

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in Scotland

,

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significantly increased between 1990 and 2002

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and became less popular by the end period. As

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to

quentity

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quantity

quality

of well

chemical

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chemicals

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in Wales and North Island rivers water started absolutely the same at 95% and 85% between 1990 and 1998

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, having been started dominant

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of Wales from 1990 to 1998,

but

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apply

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this

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figure became the second list at 80% in the chart by 2002.

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,

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of North Island became dominant at 95 % by the end time span. Turning to

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of England,

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trend

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considerably increased from 45% to 70% between 1990 and 1996

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, but

this

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trend

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experienced

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a sharply

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sharply declined

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sharp decline

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from 70% and 30% in the next two

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,

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this

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statistics

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rose gradually in the next 4

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Besides

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,

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statistics

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the statistics

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of Scotland increased slightly during 2

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, but it

was

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apply

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experienced

level

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a level

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out

at

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apply

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in the next 4

years

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;

however

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,

this

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trend

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double

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doubled

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increased from 30% to 60% during 4

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but

fallen

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fell

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considerably from 60% to 40% by

2002

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the 2002

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year.