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the charts below show the bookings for a leisure centre made by different groups in 2018 and the different times of day it was booked for in 2022.

the charts below show the bookings for a leisure centre made by different groups in 2018 and the different times of day it was booked for in 2022.
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The charts provide information on the monthly
bookings
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 for a leisure
center
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centre
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, categorized into 7 distinct
groups
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, in 2018 and 2022,
as well as
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 the distribution of booking times throughout a typical day in 2022.
Overall
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, there was an upward trend in monthly
bookings
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 for most leisure activity
groups
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, except for live music and yoga and fitness, which declined.
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, the evening time was the most popular choice among customers. In terms of monthly
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, dance
groups
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 had the highest number of
bookings
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 in both years, ranging from 25 to 27 per month.
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, the number of participants in live music saw a significant decline, dropping to about 8
bookings
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 by 2022. Language, book club, quizzes, and other
groups
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 all experienced notable growth, with
bookings
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 for these
groups
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 rising to between 15 and 25 per month in 2022.
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 for yoga and fitness,
however
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, remained steady over the four-year period at 15 per month. Regarding booking times, evening hours (1800-2100) were the most popular in 2022, accounting for 45% of total
bookings
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Following
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this
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, the afternoon slot (1500-1800) comprised one-fourth of all
bookings
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. Early morning (0600-0900) and midday (1200-1500) slots attracted a smaller share of
bookings
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, at 9% and 16%, respectively. The late morning time (0900-1200) had the smallest share, with only 5% of
bookings
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bookings, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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