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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari
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The dynamic graph below provides information about the number of
participants
 who were doing different
activities
 at the social centre in Melbourne during the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall
,
given
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the given
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 data describes 5
activities
 that were conducted between 2000 and 2020. Among them, the most popular was
film
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the film
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 club and
least
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the least
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 preferable was musical performances.
Firstly
, from the beginning
film
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the film
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 club had
most
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the most
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 number of
participants
, with over 60
person
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people
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. During
2000
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the 2000
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 and 2020
period
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periods
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, it
has
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had
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stablity
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stability
 and in 2020 the attendance number reached
to
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apply
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almost 70
person
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people
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.
Furthermore
, martial arts had a significant place among the
participants
, which is proved by the data
where
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that
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 it has
average
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an average
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35
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of 35
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 students each year. As follows, amateur dramatics had around 28
student
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students
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 in 2000, but after 2005 it
shows
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showed
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rapid
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a rapid
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 decrease every year and by 2020 there
was
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were
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 only 5
person
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people
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 who were doing amateur dramatics.
Moreover
, table tennis
activities
 did not
had
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have
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 much popularity
in
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at
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 the beginning of 2000th, but after 2010 it
shows
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showed
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marginal
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a marginal
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 leap and by 2020 it was
second
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the second
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 most preferable activity, with
a
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apply
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55
participants
.
In addition
,
except from
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unlike
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 the others, musical performance activity started in 2005 and
it
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apply
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had gradual growth till 2020. Taking everything into consideration, between 2000 and 2020 in Melbourne,
in
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apply
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Australia film
club
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clubs
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, table tennis and martial arts had
most
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the most
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participant
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participants
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,
while
 amateur dramatics and musical performances were
least
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the least
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 favourable
activities
 among the population.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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