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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single –sex schools have disadvantages later in life.

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Globally, gender-based education is still
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 practice in many countries. Some people believe that co-ed schools are better
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 others prefer single-sex educational institutions. There are multifaceted demerits
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senting
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sending
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children
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 to gender-segregated education.
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 to discuss
about
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the drawbacks of
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individuals
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 studying in
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same-gender schools. To embark on, learning in
identical
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an identical
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 sex institution can lead to
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 of socialization among other genders.
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, those
students
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 can get immersed
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 gender inequality leading to disrespecting
other
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the other
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 sex. Peers from
such
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institution
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institutions
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 becomes self-centered and
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inhibited
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, in India, the performance of
students
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 in mixed
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 is much higher compared to the
individuals
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 from same-sex
school
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schools
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.
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, there is
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 of
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discipline
 and empathy among
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is
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noticed in
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same-sex school
individuals
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. Lack of exposure to diverse viewpoints and experiences, struggle to adapt to mixed-gender professional environments and reinforced gender stereotypes which can perpetuate traditional gender roles and expectations.
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, a study on Mumbai's boys-only schools found that
students
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 held stereotypical views about women's roles in society.
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,
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 better to teach
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 at mixed educational centres for their bright future and to create them as
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healthy human
being
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 with kindness and empathy.

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language
Work on improving sentence structure and vocabulary to ensure a more sophisticated and varied language use. This will help articulate ideas more clearly and precisely.
depth of argument
Some arguments could be more developed. Consider discussing both the benefits and drawbacks of single-sex education to provide a more balanced view and enhance your argument.
introduction
The introduction effectively presents the topic and the position you take, which guides the reader through the essay.
structure
The essay has a clear structure with distinct introduction, body, and conclusion parts.
example usage
You provided relevant examples, such as examples from India, which help support your arguments well.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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