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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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illiteracy rates in the
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 year, by region ,and by gender in six areas. South
Asia
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Arab
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states
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 , Sub-saharan Africa ,Latin America and developed
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 in South
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Sub-Saharan
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 Africa in females is higher .we note that the females
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 higher than males,only in developed
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 ,and Latin America.the persantag so clous Incclod to what shows in the bar.
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higher by 55% ,followed by South
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 by 50% than
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states
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 . If we talk about the lowest area we will start with developed
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 by 2% after coming, Latin America. In terms,
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in South
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states
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 and Sub-Saharan Africa are very close to each other around 30% .developed
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 the lowest
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 by 1%. If we compare between male and female percentage.The females
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 higher than males in all areas, the highest area in both genders will be South
Asia
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, and the lowest area is developed
countries
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, arab, states, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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