The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The bar graph illustrates the proportion of children, men and women that ate five
portions
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of two types of food fruit and vegetables per day in the United Kingdom between 2001 and 2008.
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it can be seen that during whole
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all the folks increased in the number of eating
portions
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and the most significant percentage were women
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children
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the lowest number of eating food.
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with, women were the highest proportion during the whole year and it witnessed an increase in food in six
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. The most interesting thing is that in 2006 it reached the peak which was approximately 35% and
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it saw a slight
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during 2007 and 2008 around 31% and 30 respectively.
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the men was the second preferred in ate
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it remained stable in three
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just 17% and
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followed by an increase during the five
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to 25% in 2006.
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, children were the least preferred of eating
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in the following three
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it remained stable at around 13% and
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followed by
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in the following five
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it is interesting to notice that in the
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years
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witnessed a slight decline of about 21% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words portions, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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