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Some people prefer to live in rented homes rather than purchasing their own homes. Do you think advantages of living in rented house outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 present world, people have plenty of choices whether they want to purchase their own
house
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 or
wanted
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want
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 to live in
rented
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a rented
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home
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. I believe that renting
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home
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a home
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 has more advantages rather than buying their own
due to
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reasons
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the reasons
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 explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, the pros of having a
house
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 on rent.
Firstly
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, it provides people with
flexibility
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the flexibility
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 to change their
house
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 whenever they want
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due to
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for
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 any reason without having the hassle of selling a
home
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. So, renting is
benefical
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beneficial
 for those individuals who
works
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work
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 in
company
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a company
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 where they have a need to change their
home
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 from time to time.
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, my uncle is
a
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an
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employe
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employee
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in
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of
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one
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 of
the
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a
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 renowned
company
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companies
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 but he has to move from
one
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 place to another because of his work,
as a result
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, buying
property
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 in
one
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 place
do
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 not give him benefits because of mobility in his job.
Morever
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Moreover
, renting often requires a smaller financial commitment compared to buying, which
include
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 payments,
property
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 taxes and maintenance costs.
Also
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, when a person lives in a rented flat,
landlord
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the landlord
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 is the only
one
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 responsible for any repair and maintenance of
teh
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the
house
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 which helps a lot
is
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in
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 curbing the tenant's burden and expenses in
this
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 area.
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, apart from the advantages, renting a
home
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 has some disadvantages too
such
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 as lack of investment because renting does not build equity in the
property
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, meaning renters do not
benefits
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benefit
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 from
property
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 value and appreciation.
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, it has been recorded that the price of houses
had been
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has
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 increased by 45%
from
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in
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last
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the last
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 five years.
Thus
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,
increase
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an increase
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the
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in the
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 value of
property
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 is
also
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 equal to
amount
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the amount
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of
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apply
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an individual
pay
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pays
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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 buying a
house
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 provides you with a sense of security and stability in
a
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the
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long-term
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long term
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, renting is
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beneficial
benificial
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beneficial
 for those who
loves
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love
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 to explore
another places
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another place
other places
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 and for those who have jobs which
requires
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require
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 mobility
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task achievement
In the body paragraphs, ensure that each supporting point is consistently followed by specific examples or evidence to back it up. Expanding on examples can make your arguments even more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Try to refine your transitions between paragraphs to enhance flow. This will help maintain the reader's focus and guide them smoothly from one point to the next.
introduction conclusion present
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which help frame your argument effectively. The essay begins and ends with a structured approach.
logical structure
Your essay contains a logical progression of ideas, moving from advantages of renting a home to discussing its disadvantages.
relevant specific examples
The use of personal anecdotes, such as the example of your uncle, effectively demonstrates real-life relevance to your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Relocate
  • Upfront financial commitment
  • Down payments
  • Property taxes
  • Maintenance costs
  • Equity
  • Property value appreciation
  • Restrictions
  • Personal ownership
  • Stability
  • Long-term security
  • Rent increases
  • Lease terminations
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