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In many counties, plastic containers have become more common than ever and are used by Food and Drink companies. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is no denying that
plastic
 containers
became
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 overused by Food and Drink companies.Nowadays
plastic
 is
a
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common sense in
such
 areas as
supermarkets
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 shelves and grocery stores.
While
 there are several advantages to using
plastic
 as a material for containers and packaging ,there are
also
 some serious disadvantages to consider.
This
 essay will discuss how big
is
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an
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the
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 impact of
plastic
 on our world is,and how
much
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many
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 benefits and
detriment
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detriments
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is
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it
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summons
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. One of the most significant
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 is
an
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the
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 amount of pollution which
plastic
increase
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at
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on
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 the planet.
For
instance
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instance,
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plastic
 production creates greenhouses stronger in four times.The biggest global problem in our world is an ecosystem collapse.We must do everything to reduce the amount of harm we bring to the earth.
Nevertheless
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 it is noteworthy that
plastic
 is an available material,that helps
economy
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the economy
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 of
third world
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third-world
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 countries be more stable.To illustrate
plastic
-is one of the cheapest
material
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materials
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 to produce,without
plastic
 many countries would get
in
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into
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 a lot of
debts
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debt
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 because they couldn’t afford
eco clean
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eco-clean
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 stuff.
Overall
 ,
while
plastic
 production creates
filthier
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a filthier
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 environment on earth,society still needs it,we
will
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hope that one day scientists will discover an alternative material to replace
plastic
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph develops a central idea clearly and logically.
task achievement
Support arguments with specific examples or data for a stronger analysis.
task achievement
The essay acknowledges both advantages and disadvantages of using plastic containers, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The writer presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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