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the charts below shows the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990 . write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. you should

the charts below shows the levels of participation in education and science in developing and industrialised countries in 1980 and 1990 . write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. you should
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The bar charts illustrate the levels of engagement in educational and scientific activities in both developing and industrialized
nations
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 in 1980 and 1990.
Overall
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, the industrialized
nations
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 were higher
in
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at
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 every level, from schooling to science, even research and development.
First,
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on
one
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 hand, the average
years
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 of education in 1980 for developing countries were approximately 3
years
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.
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, it increased in 1990 to become around 4
years
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.
On the other hand
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, the industrialized countries in 1980 rose by 8
years
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 and in 1990 rose by 10
years
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.
Second,
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the level of science in developing
nations
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 in both periods is less than 20.
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, the industrialized
nations
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 were above 40 in both
years
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.
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, the developing side spent less than 100 billion dollars on research and development in 1980 and 1990.
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, the other
nations
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 were spending more; the cost was 150 billion in 1980 and in 1990 grew to 350 billion dollars.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nations, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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