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A recent newspaper article reported that a 14 year old boy who seriously destroyed his got the punishment to clean the street instead of being sent to prison. Do you think this is right or do you think that such criminals should be sent to prison.

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If a
14 year
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14-year-old
boy
 seriously destroys his, it's very difficult to say if he should have to be sent to prison or get a different treatment. His treatment should depend on various factors. First of all,
this
 situation can depend on the laws of the state in which
this
boy
 lives. There are many countries that have strict laws regarding minors and don't mind about your age to
sent
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 you to prison.
However
, there are many states, like the European ones, that consider your age
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 an important element. In these countries, if you are a minor, you are treated differently and to go to prison is pretty difficult. In these cases, if you are a minor and you commit a crime, you have to do some special
works
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 to serve the sentence. Some examples of these types of jobs could be activities that are similar to volunteer work, like cleaning streets and public places. Having said that, in my opinion, a minor who seriously destroyed his deserves to be treated in a special way. I think that because, when you are young, you are often carefree and you don't think about the consequences and the risks of your actions. For me, these factors
also
 depend on the family that brings you up and so it is not possible to totally
accusate
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accuse
 a
boy
 who commits a crime or destroys his. In conclusion, having
expose
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these thesis
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, I would recommend
to be
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 apprehensive
to
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 the people who judge a
boy
 in
this
 situation.
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