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The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show changes of a cinema from 1980 until now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate alternatives that happen in a
cinema
Use synonyms
 at two points in time namely, 1980 and the present.
Overall
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, it is important that the number of rooms and facilities improved, but the car park was destroyed.
According to
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 the pictures, the Entry, both sexes' Toilets, and the Ticket are in the same position as in the past; Now, the Drinks, which were next to the ticket, have been replaced by the DVD shop and the drinks joined by Food and they with the new Relax room obtain the area that the
cinema
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 1 was in . The graphs demonstrate that nowadays, the Car park was changed by
Cinema
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 2 and 3;
furthermore
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, in front of the toilets
establish
Wrong verb form
established
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 the new
Cinema
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 4 and at the bottom of it we can see
Cinema
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 5.
In addition
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, today,
cinema
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 1, which was near the Entry, is moving to the place
that is
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 next to the toilets.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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