the charts below show the changes in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the informar=tion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where revelant.

the charts below show the changes in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. 

summarise the informar=tion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where revelant.
the
firs
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line graph illustrates the proportion of households who have used three electric devices (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner)
since
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1920 to 2019,
while
the other line graph demonstrates the average number of hours that each
househould
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household
had
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spend
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on doing their relevant duties in their house in a typical week by 2019.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the
percentages
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of using these devices had increased by 2019,
while
the amount of time
which
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spend
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on doing housework in households decreased during
this
period. It
also
can be apparently
obviosed
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obvious
that
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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when
it
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they
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had almost no
client
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clients
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in 1920 became more popular in 2019.
According to
the first graph, the proportions of both
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, which were about 3 and 30 in 1920 in order, rose dramatically until 1960 to approximately %90 and %70 respectively,
then
followed
this
trend with less power to almost %100 for both of them.
In addition
, the percentage of using washing
machine
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machines
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which was %40 in 1920 had increased to more than %73 by 2019,
however
, it faced a little drop
between1960
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between 1960
and 1980.
On the other hand
, the
amount
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number
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of hours per week that households spent their
rutines
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routines
routine
in their home had
droped
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dropped
by 1960 from about %50 (the maximum in 1920) to %20.
Moreover
,
this
decline had continued steadily by 2019 when was the less just above %10.
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