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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in five parts of the world in 2006.

#tables #information #consumption #production #potatoes #five #parts #world
The
tables
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 chart provides key information about consumers and
producing
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the production
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 of
potatoes
 in five different countries in 2006. The units in the chart above
is
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are
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 measured in
kilogram
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kilograms
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 per
person
 and for
production
 in
million
tonnes
.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that,
European's
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Europe's
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 consumption of
potatoes
 was the highest
between
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among
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five
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the five
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 countries at 96.1 kilograms per
person
 and In
production
 Asia
was
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increased
at
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to
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 131.2
in
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million
tonnes
.
In addition
, buyer numbers in North
America
at
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 57.9.
Whereas
, in
production
 was 24,7 in
million
tonnes
.
According to
 what is shown,
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the consumptions
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consumptions
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consumption
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 of
potatoes
 in North
America
 rose
at
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 57.9. As for, Africa was lowest at 14.1
in
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Kg per
person
.
Moreover
, Both South and Central
America
 and Asia
almost
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are almost
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 equal at 25,8
in
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apply
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Kg per
person
. In terms
of
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,
European's
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Europe's
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Production
 of
potatoes
was
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the
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increased
at
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to
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 126.3. As for, North
American
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America
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 was declined
at
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to
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 24,7 in
million
tonnes
.
Moreover
, South and Central
America
 and Africa have almost the same numbers at 16.4
in
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apply
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million
tonnes
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words potatoes, person, production, million, tonnes, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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