The graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 and 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reportin the main features, making comparisions where relevant

The graph shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 and 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reportin the main features, making comparisions where relevant
The line graph illustrates the percentages of four recycled materials
consists
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consisting
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of paper & cardboard, glass containers, aluminium cans and plastics that were recycled between 1982 and 2010.
Overall
, paper & cardboard and glass containers were two types of stuff that started recycling in the first year
that
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apply
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given.
whereas
aluminium cans started reprocessed in 1986 and other plastics in 1990. The percentages of recycled paper & cardboard
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
have fluctuated
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sharply, it began
around
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at around
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65
percent
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per cent
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in 1982 and reached to peak at 80
percent
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per cent
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in 1994 before
declined
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declining
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to 70
percent
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per cent
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in
last
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the last
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year.
Likewise
, glass containers were unstable dramatically,
it
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they
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started at 50
percent
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per cent
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in
first
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the first
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year given and dipped
in
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to
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the lowest point at 40
percent
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per cent
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in 1990 after that
climbed
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climbing
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to the highest point
at
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of
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60
percent
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per cent
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in the
last
ten years of
chart
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the chart
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duration.
On the other hand
, aluminium cans that initiated
reprocessed
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reprocessing
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in 1986
were
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apply
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increased substantially to
the
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a
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peak in 2010
around
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at around
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45
percent
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per cent
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as
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apply
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the same as plastics that began
around
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at around
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3
percent
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per cent
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were slightly increased to the highest point
around
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of around
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10
percent
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per cent
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at the end
of
graph
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the graph
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timeline.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.

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