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You are having problems with a neighbour’s animals because the fence between your properties is old and In poor repair. You want the neighbour to pay half the cost of building a new fence. Write a letter to your neighbour. In your letter •say what the problems are •explain how a new fence will solve the problems •suggest that the neighbour pays half of the cost

#neighbour’s #animals #fence #properties #repair #neighbour #half #cost #•say #•explain #•suggest
Dear neighbour, We have lived many years friendly.
Therefore
, today I have to explain one issue regarding our neighbourhood. Your animals,
such
 as your goat, faced complexity in my
fence
 since they ate our old
fence
 woods.
Although
 my
fence
 is getting older, we need an excellent visible facility. We decided to change a new
fence
 which exists between our houses. Unfortunately,
this
fence
 requires a lot of paling or materials and even requires significant salary action workers. So I have decided only to renovate it, not build a new
fence
.
Furtermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
, we are neighbours
should
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who should
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be renovate
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renovate
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 our facility, particularly
we
Correct word choice
if we
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 start
remont
Correct your spelling
remote
 the
fence
 it will
be require
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require
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 cost less than
build
Wrong verb form
building
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 a new facility. and I think so you must
to
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apply
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share my all cost demands to
remont
Correct your spelling
remount
.I will organise the all renovation
operation
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operations
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 and you should pay
a
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apply
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half
cost
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the cost
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 of building the
fence
. In my opinion, it would be fair. I will spend
much
Correct quantifier usage
a lot of
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 time. You have to care
your
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for your
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 goat again
eat
Correct word choice
and eat
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 a new
fence
. I hope to you understand
real
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the real
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 situation. Sincerely,
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coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical flow of your letter by clearly outlining the problems, explaining the solution, and then proposing the cost-sharing arrangement in distinct sections.
task achievement
Improve grammatical accuracy and word choice to convey your message more effectively. This will help in achieving a suitable writing tone.
task achievement
You acknowledged the friendly relationship with your neighbour at the beginning, which sets a positive tone.
task achievement
You included all necessary components: problem description, solution proposal, and cost-sharing suggestion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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