In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
RECENTLY, MANY
PEOPLE
CONSIDER THAT HAVING OWN HOME IS CRUCIAL RATHER THAN RENTING. THERE A
FEW REASONS BEHIND IT, I THINK Add a missing verb
ARE A
ALTHOUGH
IT HAS SOME DRAWBACKS, IT IS LARGELY
POSITIVE SITUATION.
TO START WITH REASONS, Correct article usage
A LARGELY
PEOPLE
WANT TO HAVE THEIR OWN PRIVATE HOUSE
RATHER THAN RENTING SOMEONE'S HOUSE
, AND PRICES OF RENTING HOMES ARE INCREASING DAY BY DAY. INDIVIDUALS HARDLY MAKE ENDS MEET, SO THEY THINK THAT IT IS TROUBLESOME PAY
MONEY Fix the infinitive
TO PAY
BOTH
RENTED HOUSES AND Change preposition
FOR BOTH
UTILITY
LIKE, GAS, WATER AND MANY MORE.
ON THE ONE HAND, OWNING A HOME IS MORE COMFORTABLE, AS INDIVIDUALS CAN ADORN THEIR HOUSES WITH DECORATION OR Fix the agreement mistake
UTILITIES
RECONSTURCT
HOW THEY WANT. Correct your spelling
RECONSTRUCT
ADDITIONALLY
, HOMEOWNERS PUT SOME LIMITS AND STRICT REGULATIONS ON PEOPLE
WHO RENT THEIR HOUSES, SUCH
AS, ONCE WHEN I RENTED HOUSE
, I BROKE A PLATE OF HOMEOWNERS SHE FINED ME AND OBLIGED ME TO PAY MORE MONEY RATHER THANCorrect article usage
A HOUSE
IT'S
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ITS
ORGINAL
COSTS.
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ORIGINAL
ON THE OTHER HAND
,SOME POEPLE
LIVE IN A LOW-INCOME FAMILY, SO THEY CAN NOT OWN THEIR PRIVATE Correct your spelling
PEOPLE
HOUSE
, ON THAT OCCASION RENTING HOUSE
IS Correct article usage
A HOUSE
BETTER
OPTION.
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A BETTER
TO CONCLUDE
, DUE TO
FEEL
COMFORTABLE AND BEING FAR AWAY FROM LIMITATIONS MORE Wrong verb form
FEELING
PEOPLE
PREFER TO HAVE OWN
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THEIR OWN
HOUSE
, I THINK IT BETTER
THAN LIVING IN A Add a missing verb
IS BETTER
RENTEND
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RENTED
HOUSE
,HOWEVER
SOME Add a comma
HOWEVER,
PEOPLE
PREFER RENTING HOUSE
AS HAVING FINANCIAL PROBLEMS.Correct article usage
A HOUSE
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