In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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RECENTLY, MANY
PEOPLE
CONSIDER THAT HAVING OWN HOME IS CRUCIAL RATHER THAN RENTING. THERE
A
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FEW REASONS BEHIND IT, I THINK
ALTHOUGH
IT HAS SOME DRAWBACKS, IT IS
LARGELY
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POSITIVE SITUATION. TO START WITH REASONS,
PEOPLE
WANT TO HAVE THEIR OWN PRIVATE
HOUSE
RATHER THAN RENTING SOMEONE'S
HOUSE
, AND PRICES OF RENTING HOMES ARE INCREASING DAY BY DAY. INDIVIDUALS HARDLY MAKE ENDS MEET, SO THEY THINK THAT IT IS TROUBLESOME
PAY
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MONEY
BOTH
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FOR BOTH
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RENTED HOUSES AND
UTILITY
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UTILITIES
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LIKE, GAS, WATER AND MANY MORE. ON THE ONE HAND, OWNING A HOME IS MORE COMFORTABLE, AS INDIVIDUALS CAN ADORN THEIR HOUSES WITH DECORATION OR
RECONSTURCT
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RECONSTRUCT
HOW THEY WANT.
ADDITIONALLY
, HOMEOWNERS PUT SOME LIMITS AND STRICT REGULATIONS ON
PEOPLE
WHO RENT THEIR HOUSES,
SUCH
AS, ONCE WHEN I RENTED
HOUSE
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, I BROKE A PLATE OF HOMEOWNERS SHE FINED ME AND OBLIGED ME TO PAY MORE MONEY RATHER THAN
IT'S
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ORGINAL
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ORIGINAL
COSTS.
ON THE OTHER HAND
,SOME
POEPLE
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PEOPLE
LIVE IN A LOW-INCOME FAMILY, SO THEY CAN NOT OWN THEIR PRIVATE
HOUSE
, ON THAT OCCASION RENTING
HOUSE
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A HOUSE
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IS
BETTER
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A BETTER
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OPTION.
TO CONCLUDE
,
DUE TO
FEEL
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FEELING
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COMFORTABLE AND BEING FAR AWAY FROM LIMITATIONS MORE
PEOPLE
PREFER TO HAVE
OWN
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THEIR OWN
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HOUSE
, I THINK IT
BETTER
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IS BETTER
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THAN LIVING IN A
RENTEND
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RENTED
HOUSE
,
HOWEVER
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HOWEVER,
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SOME
PEOPLE
PREFER RENTING
HOUSE
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A HOUSE
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AS HAVING FINANCIAL PROBLEMS.
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You have identified multiple reasons why people might prefer owning a home over renting.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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