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The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs and countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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There is no denying the fact that traffic is
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issue
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face
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 many countries around the
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world
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nowday
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nowadays
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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convince
convenience
people
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 to transfer from cities to other
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options
, can solve
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 problem, there is an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that seeing
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solution
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 from one angle without
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 the root
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 led to
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failure
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the right result. To
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begin
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the increase
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population
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have
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 not
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issue
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caused
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that caused
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the
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traffic problems.
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, depending on
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 source of transportation is the problem. In
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addition
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 out more
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then
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way
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ways
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 to transport، it can mitigate
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, Saudi Arabia
,
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was suffer
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was suffering
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 from
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traffic
congesion
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congestion
, afterward they
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launched
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 the metro, which
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big
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a big
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differnt
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difference
different
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peoblem
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problem
. Another point to consider,
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motivite
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motivate
people
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 to avoid using
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a car
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car
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cars
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 unless it is necessary. It is
also
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 possible to say that,
encourging
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encouraging
people
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 to
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walk
, which
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 on their
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health
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,
raising
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rising
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 oil
price
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prices
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 with reducing metro tickets can
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force
enforce
people
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 to use alternative
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methods
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, Japan,
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nudge
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nudges
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 to convince
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 to walk. In conclusion, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe we can not solve
traffic
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the traffic
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issue
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,
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 if we overlocking to the main
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cause
. Sometimes the
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 front our
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faces
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, but we can not take
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action
 for
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 consideration.
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, fearing
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public
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the public
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 reaction.
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Secondly
, some political regards can ban us
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from thinking
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 on
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the other
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 side. Putting forward all solutions and making an objective decision will solve
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear main idea and is logically connected to the rest of the essay. This will enhance the overall coherence and flow of your essay.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific and clearly relevant examples to bolster your main arguments. This will make your essay more convincing.
general
Pay attention to your spelling and grammar by doing another round of revision or using tools such as Grammarly. This will help in reducing small inaccuracies.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, which help frame the response to the prompt.
task achievement
You address multiple perspectives on the topic, which shows you're considering different angles of the problem.
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The examples you provided, such as the metro in Saudi Arabia and walking in Japan, effectively illustrate points about diversifying transportation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban sprawl
  • commuting time
  • associated pollution
  • viable
  • efficient public transport systems
  • reliance on private vehicles
  • sustainable urban planning
  • pedestrian-friendly
  • overcrowding
  • urban sprawl
  • housing prices
  • strain on public services
  • innovative
  • high-density
  • amenities
  • proximity
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