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People believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn and should not pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Taxes
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 provide the
government
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 with revenue to fund public
good
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goods
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 and health, some argue that the local
authority
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authorities
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 have no
right
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 to have
tax
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taxes
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 and they would rather keep the money to themselves than
giving
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 it to the
government
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,
although
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 I highly disagree with
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 belief, as paying
taxes
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 bridges the gaps between the haves and the have-nots, it is an attempt
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 to share the burden of economic growth. First and foremost, paying
taxes
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 will help the
government
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 in the development and maintenance of infrastructure, building new schools,
hospitals
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and hospitals
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 and maintaining roads.
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, funding local
government
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 entities like police, fire stations and public parks will benefit the
overall
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 society.
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, Norway is ranked for its best healthcare system in terms of quick medical services, medications and
hospital
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hospitals
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. They believe that everyone has the
right
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 to better health, regardless of
the
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age, nationality and even gender in return the people pay 40%
taxes
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of
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 their monthly income.
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, some critics argue that paying
tax
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taxes
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 is of no use and they prefer to keep the money for their personal needs. But
this
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 is not the case, as
taxes
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 can
also
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 help poor people to have a chance for a better living, make sure that their children will guarantee a place in schools and
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offer them the
right
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 to be medically treated as they can’t afford expensive medicines and hospitals, which will lead to equality and a mental stable society that all their basic needs are settled.
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, during these Corona times, the nation realized the need for
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 improvement in the health & Medicare sector in our country.
Inconclusion
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 paying
taxes
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 is vital for a better society, it will enhance
the
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economic growth and will assist the
government
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 with all the
suggested
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 for a better country and better people. Every citizen or resident has the
right
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 to
fulfill
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 his basic needs. We need
taxes
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 to run a country, it is not a privilege but a duty.

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task achievement
Ensure that examples directly support the argument. For instance, include more details about how tax systems contribute to social programs, and make sure every example directly supports the point being made.
coherence cohesion
Refine your use of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions and clear connections between paragraphs and ideas. Proofread to ensure there are no abrupt changes in topics or ideas.
overall language use
Introduce more paraphrasing and sophisticated vocabulary to elevate the quality of writing. Also, work on reducing repetitive phrases and word choices.
task achievement
The argument is clearly stated, and a clear position is maintained throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a logical flow of ideas and clear organization, with distinct paragraphs for each separate point.
introduction conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the main points and reiterates the writer's stance, leaving a strong final impression.
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