Some people feel that governments should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools. Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing.
There is a widely spread opinion that governments should take a huge part of citizen’s
money
for the
state necessaries Correct article usage
apply
such
roads
and schools. At the same Change preposition
as roads
time
there are supporters of the idea of low Add a comma
time,
taxes
. Probably, such
a controversial position could be connected to a fear of trustful money
management in governments. Obviously, some people prefer more
to have bigger amounts of Correct quantifier usage
apply
money
and to diversificate
them Correct your spelling
diversify
according to
their priorities, and another part is ready to contribute more taxes
and receive quality conditions of their living.
Firstly
, the part of people who stay with idea
that it should Correct article usage
the idea
be taken
a big portion of their incomes are mostly liberal and wealthy taxpayers. Their main idea is a personal responsibilityWrong verb form
take
,
when especially from you depends on your local infrastructure and public services. Remove the comma
apply
For example
, in some European countries
Add a comma
countries,
this
system was already implemented, where the percentage of investments in regions or cities was mostly taken from extra payments from salaries. Actually, it is sometimes efficient, because the bigger amount
of Correct article usage
the amount
money
is in the city with bigger taxes
, the bigger profit
receives Correct article usage
the profit
all
Change preposition
from all
developments
in Correct article usage
the developments
this
town, like public transport, social care benefits and
etc.
Another point to consider, those who are Correct word choice
apply
contra
Change preposition
against
this
vision say that it would have a bad impact on the net income of civilians. Especially, would be very vulnerable disadvantaged citizens from a poor category. This
extra portion could be used for urgent needs like food, accommodation and medicine. For instance
, there is already a big
bunch of Correct word choice
large
taxes
, which are paid by a normal human such
as local taxes
, health and social care payments, road fees for car owners, Correct word choice
and pensions
pensions
contributions.
Change the noun form
pension
Finally
, there is no clear answer for
Change preposition
to
this
issue, it is quite dependent on especially situation and country. My point is that should
exist a golden middle, Correct pronoun usage
there should
in other
words
Add the comma(s)
words,
a progressive tax systems
, where vulnerable segments of Correct the article-noun agreement
progressive tax systems
a progressive tax system
population
would be freed from extra payments, Add an article
the population
however
as person
Add an article
a person
the person
is
richer, as more he would pay Verb problem
becomes
necessary
public services.Change preposition
for necessary
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coherence cohesion
Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve cohesion between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments, especially when discussing different countries' taxation systems.
coherence cohesion
Work on varying sentence structures and using more complex sentences to enhance clarity and development of ideas.
introduction conclusion present
You have presented a clear introduction, discussing both viewpoints on government taxation.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion provides a balanced view, recognizing the complexity of the issue and suggesting a middle ground via progressive taxation.
task achievement
You mentioned different perspectives and some real-world references, such as European countries implementing specific tax systems.
Your opinion
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