The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.  

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides the following for generating smoked
fish
Overall
,there are a total of 13 processes in
this
diagram.The starting point is fishing and finishing with the
fish
store.In
this
picture,the starting position is fishing and
then
the
fish
are delivered to the port by boat.After that, they are put in the refrigerator and
then
thawed in fresh water.
Then
they are cut and washed in salt water with yellow colors.Afterwards, after they are smoked, they are packaged and sent to the refrigerator
Rephrase
when
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the temperature is 0 degrees and
finally
, they are distributed frozen to
fish
stores.
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